On Tursday the 30th Of July we went to the zoo and I was in Mrs Remigton group at the zoo.
what I enjoyed Watching was John Tell about Anjalie time in Auckland Zoo And her time Around Where she lived.
To:Shivran I liked it how you told us about the zoo trip because you were talking about what you liked. Make sure next time that your sentences make sense and you ad more detail to your blog. I also liked it how you were talking about Anjalie the elephant. From Nisita
To:Shivran I liked it how you told us about the zoo trip because you were talking about what you liked. Make sure next time that your sentences make sense and you ad more detail to your blog. I also liked it how you were talking about Anjalie the elephant. From Nisita
Shivran, This is incomplete- it is not 6-10 sentences. You need to go back and edit this by providing more detail- your blog buddy's comment is almost as long as your post! Ms W
To:Shivran
ReplyDeleteI liked it how you told us about the zoo trip because you were talking about what you liked.
Make sure next time that your sentences make sense and you ad more detail to your blog.
I also liked it how you were talking about Anjalie the elephant.
From Nisita
Ka pai Nisita,
DeleteThis is an excellent comment. You gave two clear positive comments with a very specific suggestion for improvement. Well done.
Ms W
To:Shivran
ReplyDeleteI liked it how you told us about the zoo trip because you were talking about what you liked.
Make sure next time that your sentences make sense and you ad more detail to your blog.
I also liked it how you were talking about Anjalie the elephant.
From Nisita
Shivran,
ReplyDeleteThis is incomplete- it is not 6-10 sentences. You need to go back and edit this by providing more detail- your blog buddy's comment is almost as long as your post!
Ms W